Sal is calling you "MC" despite typing in your name at the start, after he finds you. Estelle does the same. You may wanna fix that.
And they keep doing it. There's clearly something wrong with your coding as far as the name is concerned.
I'm glad that it tells you it is a man you run into, because it looks like he has boobs. I might never have guessed his gender....
(As a rule: Men should not be able to display cleavage like that, and their chest do not fill out to the sides. Maybe bodybuilders do --which is one reason I dislike them-- but normal guys don't.)
The art....could be improved. A lot.
The background are fine, but the characters....
Very short game. Might be interesting if there is more to it later.
Although the demo is far to short to say for sure.