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169 pages, Kindle Edition
Published July 10, 2024
I found this book very hard to read, which was disappointing because it looked like I would have loved it based on the blurb. It was told in present tense, which is difficult for me, but I could have managed if it were just that. Unfortunately, the writing felt very clumsy, with all "telling" and almost no "showing". There were also quite a few times when the book just said the character asks a question, rather than giving dialogue.
An example:
I try to distract her by asking how today has gone for her and if the ball is starting out how she wants.
“It’s going well; I am happy with this evening so far.”
...It just seemed like the author was kind of avoiding dialogue.
And finally, the author appeared to be scared of using contraction in a fantasy book. It may have just been to sound more historical, but contractions have actually been around for centuries, so there's nothing wrong with using them in a book that takes place that far in the past, especially since it's fantasy.
The book could have been better, especially with such a good plot, but the writing just didn't work.